Tuesday, 11 September 2012

The cry of the soul...

Drenched in the rain of mistakes,
Flowed in the waves of sins,
I try to stand,
Walk to cover the miles on the endless road,
Unaware of where I am heading.

The moment I feel I am on the right path,
The very next moment I am
trapped 
and tied to the cage of guilt,
From where escaping is just a myth.

Helpless I lie, in one corner of this dark cage,
I die hundred deaths every minute,
Lonely I scream, I yell,
Lonely I cry, I bleed,
None to heal.
I just wait to end this ordeal.


In this day to day life we commit so many sins and mistakes, we go against our ethics just for the temporary happiness, but in this meanwhile we always tend to forget the pain our soul undergoes each time we commit some sin.. 

57 comments:

  1. This is such a real hardhitting poem! Dieng hundred times! So very beautiful words. Loved it totally!

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  2. Very powerful words, Sonia. I agree with you, we commit a lot of sins just to gain momentary happiness, but those sins will come back to haunt us in the long run. You have conveyed such complicated emotions very beautifully. Loved it. :)

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    1. Thanks Akshay.. Have written something after a long time.. Glad that u liked it :)

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  3. Ahh!!....so sad....But feelings are penned beautifully...Lovely writing!

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  4. You got an awesome illustration for your poem.

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  5. Wonderful piece of writing and so profound- Guilt is a slow poison which can kill anytime and it is the feeling where people stop seeing the beauty of life.

    " tied to the cage of guilt,
    From where escaping is just a myth"

    Though these lines are good but it is not myth that you can not escape from the prison of guilt, guilt is self made prison and the key of forgiving yourself is the only way out. So to end this guilt one need to forgive himself/herself.
    So waiting is not the solution to end this ordeal, but forgiving yourself for your misdeed which you have done it knowingly or unknowingly.
    Overall I love the way you weaved every word beautifully and I can predict that you have all the potential to be great poetess.
    Keep writing...
    Cheers!!!

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    1. Well said Mithlash.. The guilt is self created prison whose key is with us itself.. Just a step towards positive thought can bring anyone out of guilt:)
      N Thank u so much for the appreciation for this piece of work.. Your words really mean a lot :) Thank u once again:)

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  6. whenever you write English poem, you surprise me:)

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  7. ..powerful..profound..hard hitting, Sonia!
    superb:)

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  8. Wow, the words are so powerful.. You're right, Sonia.. people commit mistakes and sins and hurt others just for a temporary happiness.. I hope they will realise the meaning of real happiness soon..
    XOXO

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    1. So true Fida.. :( Thank u for the comment:)

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  9. Woah! I was blown away by the words. Hope u r doin well.

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    1. Hey Ria I am doing good.. How abt u? BTW, Thank u :)

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  10. Very nice poem mam ... i checked your blog and i really liked it... i am your latest follower
    Smiles
    Way2express~~

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    1. Hey Thank u so much for the beautiful words :) Welcome to my blog Anu:)

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  11. *Insert heartfelt comment of your choice*

    Really not good at expressing emotions, so I'll just go with 'Ouch'. :P

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    1. Hahaha.. Though u may not be good in expressing emotions I loved your comment.. I feel this is d best comment my blog has received till date ;-P

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    2. Well, it is pretty powerful, got to admit that :)

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  12. The line where you wrote about being trapped is true in many ways. Honestly, I loved the last paragraph, it has such a mature, powerful and numbing impact on the reader. You are evolving as a writer and feels so good to read your work Sonia.

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    1. Awww.. These words from u means a lot to me :) Thank u so much.. U made ma day...

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    2. It is indeed a powerful poem. :)

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    3. Thanks Di.. Thanks for such an overwhelming appreciation :)

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  13. every line is so true Sonia and each word is a conviction to all of us..it is worth pondering..visiting you ;)

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    1. Thank u sie.. I hope everything is fine at ur end now.. Thanks for the visit..

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  14. This was sheer magic. You have written something so profound; you have brought out something that lies in the depths of our hearts through your soul-stirring words. Your poem echoed the voice of our inner conscience. Flawless poetry.

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  15. So nice to read this beautiful composition from you Sonia after a long time!

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  16. more than anything if the ill feel of doing that sin start haunting us then a day comes when we think again n again before going for the sin again...

    Thoughtful one....!

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    1. Hey thats so true Irfan ji.. Thanks for the visit:)

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  17. Hey Sonia, very deep and poignant words.. you're right in saying that the soul picks on a lot of unwanted vibes in today's times when we do things just for that instant of temporary gratification.. how much better it was in the good ol days when things were more black and white, with very less of grey..

    Very poignant and so full of meaning.. brilliantly written Sonia :)

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    1. How true Raj.. Good old times were more better then this fast and furious life where we have no time even for our self.. Thanks for the appreciation and thanks for following :)

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  18. thats beautiful piece of poetry..hard hitting !

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    1. Hey Thank u so much Alka.. Its a pleasure to get a compliment from a writer like u :) I am honored :)

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  19. Emotional one but a true one...
    Loved it..

    Take Care

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    1. Thanks Fatima.. I am really glad u liked it:)

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  20. Wow Beautiful interpretation awesome lines Sonia... I am following you right away :D

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  21. Dark...too dark..yet creates an imagery in my mind which I liked.
    Beautifully woven..
    btw thanku for ur comment...I have written beautiful before..maybe you shud discover more. Thanku anyways :)

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  22. Hey Thanks.. :) S ur right may be I shud discover more :)

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  23. Woah this blog is excellent i really like reading your articles. Stay up the great paintings! You recognize, a lot of persons are searching around for this information, you can help them greatly.

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  24. it felt as if you were telling how i feel inside .. very beautiful poem Sonia .. your new follower ..

    regards
    rahul

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    1. Now that's a good compliment.. Thank u Rahul :)

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  25. alright how do i subscribe to your blog .. i can't find the subscribe button anywhere on the page :-(

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    1. Hmm I have not added subscription to my blog.. Thanks for following anyways.. :)

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  26. after a long time a poem worth feeling...:)
    cheers..

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